[quote name='xilddx' timestamp='1366386752' post='2051984']
Ok I'll be perfectly honest or it's not worth commenting. There are a lot of songs like this around. It doesn't really stand out among them as special or different. The mix isn't too bad but it needs some balance and more punch. The vocalist is good but I find the oversouling and vocal ticks annoying, simply because so many lady voices in this genre sound like that, and it's not the true voice of the singer, more like a pastiche. You should work on the lyrics, sorry to say this but some of the lines are a bit corny, and it's the same old story we've heard so many times, try to tell it in a more original way. The cadence and chords are too bland, too common, try to make them more interesting and emotional with some harmonic, rhythmic or melodic devices. It's a good effort, but it needs a lot of work to make it sparkle. We've all been here mate. Keep at it and you'll get there with hard work and cultivating your imagination. Read inspiring prose and poetry to develop your lyrical style. Take your lyrics writing as seriously as the music. Best of luck man, I hope reading this didn't hurt too much.
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I wish you much success.