This song is called "I'll meet you behined your eyelids", I wrote it with the intention of introducing more people to the psychedelic meme of the primacy of mind. The idea that mind is the primary and fundamental component of existence.
I've written in hardcore and progressive metal bands for a around a decade and this is my first venture out into a more pop method of production and composition. I want to start writing music that will pay my bills, without compromising my artistic integrity. This is my attempt at such a song;
[url="https://soundcloud.com/bomillward/ill-meet-you-behind-your-eyelids"]https://soundcloud.com/bomillward/ill-meet-you-behind-your-eyelids[/url]
I'm looking for feedback on;
1. Arrangement
2. Composition / Lyrics
3. Performance (Vocal and instrumental)
4. Production (Sounds and styles used)
5. Mix and master (How well the song competes with commercial clarity and volume)
Lyrics;
I'll meet you behind your eyelids,
You'll see through the eye of the storm,
Transfixed on the horizon,
The beauty in all structure and form,
Do you sense more than you see?
Do you wish always to be free?
Then know your not alone in here.
I'll meet you behind your eyelids,
In the silence that you call home,
I can see you in your world,
Trapped in your nightmares,
I want to free you from these words,
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Be as candid as you like, I want truthful comment on how I can improve my work.
Much love
Bo
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